The start of a novel ? Can someone read this and tell me what they think please.?

Nicely done for a first attempt! On the down side, I found there were way too many descriptives, especially in the first few sentences. To use an old writer's cliche, "show, don't tell". Other then that, I'm not sure what your story line is because the excerpt is so short. On the positive, your dialogue flows very well and your characters interactions are good. Your excerpt is edited well (seriously, thanks for that!) and it is easy to read. Good luck and keep writing!